Tuesday, January 10, 2017

Screaming for an OL and Receiving an UL

From here:
  • The original text

There are five exceptions that are not considered Education Records:
  • Personal notes of the University of Iowa faculty and staff (never shared with another individual)
  • Employment records (provided employment is not contingent on the individual being enrolled as a student first.)
  • Medical and counseling records used solely for treatment
  • Records in the Department of Public Safety
  • Financial records of a parent or spouse

  • If I was not going to use a numbered (ol) list, I would not specify the number and the text would look like this:

These are the exceptions that are not considered Education Records:
  • Personal notes of the University of Iowa faculty and staff (never shared with another individual)
  • Employment records (provided employment is not contingent on the individual being enrolled as a student first.)
  • Medical and counseling records used solely for treatment
  • Records in the Department of Public Safety
  • Financial records of a parent or spouse

  • If I was going to specify the number of exceptions (5), I would have the original text as follows:

There are five exceptions that are not considered Education Records:
  1. Personal notes of the University of Iowa faculty and staff (never shared with another individual)
  2. Employment records (provided employment is not contingent on the individual being enrolled as a student first.)
  3. Medical and counseling records used solely for treatment
  4. Records in the Department of Public Safety
  5. Financial records of a parent or spouse

  • Finally, if it were totally up to me, I would not have the number in the lead-in sentence and I would have an numbered list. Thus, the text would look like this:

These are the exceptions that are not considered Education Records:
  1. Personal notes of the University of Iowa faculty and staff (never shared with another individual)
  2. Employment records (provided employment is not contingent on the individual being enrolled as a student first.)
  3. Medical and counseling records used solely for treatment
  4. Records in the Department of Public Safety
  5. Financial records of a parent or spouse

But what do I know?

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